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I'm trying to translate accurately the following text (JP > EN)...

I'm particularly puzzled about the part: " **多大の貢献をなし他の範とするところ** ". Did I
understand the meaning well? Does "他の範" refer to other departments in the
company?

> 表彰状  
>  貴部所は建築工事表彰内規に基づき平成二十八年度建築工事中総合成績が極めて優秀であって会社の技術水準並びに業績の向上に
> **多大の貢献をなし他の範とするところ** 甚大であると認められるので兹に所員一同の功績に対し表彰金を贈り表彰します。

## My English translation:

Certificate of Distinction

In light of the superior and all-round excellence of your department’s
achievements in 2016 in the domain of construction work, which has brought
about major contributions to the improvement of our company’s technological
abilities and performance, **unparalleled in other sectors** , and on the
basis of our company’s internal regulations as regards commendations, I hereby
present your department with this certificate and its corresponding financial
award in recognition of the achievements of all department members.
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grammar business-japanese
Translation: 多大の貢献をなし他の範とするところ
Try something like "and serves as/has set a tremendous example for the other
departments" for the 他の範とするところ甚大である part.

Breaking it down a little:

  * 他の範 → a good model/example for others

  * とするところ → the element/aspect of serving as/setting, the way it acts/serves as

  * 甚大である → great, enormous, tremendous

The rest looks pretty good, although strictly speaking, the Japanese text says
"technological _level_ /standard and performance" rather than _abilities_ ,
but your version is perfectly possible in the broader context.

Even for a certificate like this, that's impressively formal and stilted
language, though. I get a vision of the person presenting it stumbling over 兹に
while reading it during the award ceremony! :)
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> Does "他の範" refer to other departments in the company?

Yes.

「会社」の中の「貴 **部所** 」なので、「 **他** の範」の「他」は「 **他** 部所」を意味します。 表彰を受ける「 **所** 員」は「貴部
**所** 」の「 **所員** 」です。

一般には「部所」とは言わず「部署」と言いますが、この会社の組織構成が「＊＊＊部」と「＊＊＊所」が同格で存在しているものと思われます。すなわち、この会社では、研究所、事業所のように部署名の最後に「所」が付く部署と、営業部、人事部、経理部のように部署名の最後に「部」が付く部署が併存しているものと思われます。「部所」は「部ならびに所」を表し、一般にいう「部署」を指しているものと思われます。
一般には貴部署、他部署というと _your department_ and _the other department_ in the
companyですが、この会社では「＊＊所」も「＊＊部」も一般にいう「部署 _department_ 」と考えてよいと思います。
今回表彰を受ける部署の従業員は、「所員」と呼ばれていますので、研究所、事業所のように部署名の最後に「所」が付く部署の従業員です。
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「他 **の** 範とするところ甚大である」 means 「他（の部署・人たち） **が** ｛お手本にする（べき）ところが大きい /
見習う（べき）ところがたくさんある｝」, " _lit._ (The department) has a lot for the other
departments to follow", i.e. "(The department) is a good example for others to
follow". The の in 他の marks the subject for the verb phrase 範とする ("to follow
someone's example").
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The part you excerpted crosses the boundary of phrasing. It's actually,

> 会社の技術水準並びに業績の向上に **多大の貢献をなし** / **他の範とするところ** 甚大である

While the first portion aptly corresponds with your translation:

> _...has brought about major contributions to the improvement of our
> company’s technological abilities and performance..._

the real problem is in the second portion.

> 他の範とするところ甚大である

This wording utilizes a relatively rare as well as ceremonious construction.
ところ seen here is a literal translation of [the (Classical) Chinese relative
particle 所](https://www.chineseboost.com/grammar/suo-structural-particle/)
(for grammatical details please see the link), that, in short, makes `AのVところ`
mean "what A V". Thus,

> 他の範とするところ甚大である  
>  = "what others (can) take as model is huge"  
>  ≈ _from what others (can) learn is huge_  
>  ≈ _(you) set a profound example to others_
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