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I am trying to do a translation of this sentence and make it as literal as
possible and keep the shine of the wordplay, as part of a wordplay game I am
doing with a friend. I attempted a 直訳, but I am not sure what I should do with
死ぬほど, well, and 死にたい. There seems to be some intended puns packed into this
line. By the way, I am not sure about the exact source of this quote, probably
from a book or a show or something, but it is invoked online from time to
time.

> あなたが「死にたい」と思った今日は、昨日死んだ人達が死ぬほど「生きたい」と思った日なんです

My first stab:

> When you are thinking about death you need to know at the same time a lot of
> people who will die are trying so desperately to live.

And that was a complete failure and wasn't a literal translation in any sense
of the word. I also thought of "so much that they could/want to die" but it
didn't seem to work either. Another stab:

> When you are contemplating death, a lot of people who have died have all
> been in the same boat where their wish to survive was the death of them.

To my dismay the last part strays semantically...

### Edit:

One of the things I was struggling with in particular was the identification
of 昨日 and 今日. Is that hypothetical? I felt like 今日 was a temporal point with
respect to あなた, while 昨日 only applied to 死んだ人達. So how do they connect? Is the
sentence saying "your today is their yesterday" or is it merely metaphorical?
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translation japanese-to-english puns
Literal rendition of 死ぬほど
My _literal_ translation would be:

> Today, when you thought about death, is the same day those who died
> yesterday would have killed to live.

As you can tell, I am not a native speaker of English and therefore cannot
tell how much this really makes sense or to what extent the part with “would
have killed” retains the original pun.

* * *

A second try...

> Today, when you thought of dying, is the same day those who died yesterday
> had been dying to live.
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Let me share my translation attempt too:

> You were thinking of dying today, while those who died yesterday would have
> died for being alive [today].
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It seems that the [original
quote](https://detail.chiebukuro.yahoo.co.jp/qa/question_detail/q139018818)
comes from a book called 「カシコギ」by Korean author 趙 昌仁 (Cho Chang-in).

> あなたが虚{むな}しく過ごした今日という日は、きのう死んでいったものが、あれほど生きたいと願ったあした。
>
> To the people who died yesterday, this day that you spent idling away your
> life, the day you call today, will forever be a tomorrow that they
> desperately wanted to, but never got to live.

It seems that 今日 and あした in the original quote definitely refer to _today_ and
tomorrow, but I feel like 今日 and 昨日 are sometimes used as metaphors for _the
present_ and _the past_ (although I can't think of any examples off the top of
my head).

So considering the metaphorical use of 今日 and 昨日, maybe your quote could be
translated like this:

> Before you think about dying, just consider those who couldn't afford to
> live another day.
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I'm a bit confused by the question and the answers here where there's all this
talk about _literal_ translations but no one seems to be noticing the たい of
死にたい or 生きたい. This is completely glossed over.

@JansthcirlU seems to come closest to a literal rendering and an interesting
source for this quote, but then returns to translating 死にたいと思う as "think about
dying" rather than "hoping/wanting to die".

I was interested in seeing what others would say about 死ぬほど. It seems a bit of
an exaggeration given that they're dead and they want to live to the point of
dying.

So here's my rendering:

> Today when you wish to die is a day those who died yesterday _desperately_
> hoped to live for.

to keep the pun

> Today when you wish to die is a day those who died yesterday wanted to live
> for so much they could die.

I think this is clearly a rebuke (though without any further context, that's
really hard to say). To translate 死にたいと思う as "thinking about dying" seems too
casual and the rebuke is almost lost. あなた wants to die; あなた is being rebuked
for this desire on the grounds that there are those who've died who would have
wished to live today. It's almost like, " _how dare you wish to die when there
are others who've already died who would have equally wished to live another
day._ "

And so perhaps a bit closer (and I question whether this really comes through
at all in the Japanese, but here I go)

> あなたが「死にたい」と思った今日は、昨日死んだ人達が _死ぬほど_ 「生きたい」と思った日なんです

> Today when you want to die is the day when others who died yesterday wanted
> to live _to the degree that you die_.
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