Is my sentence correct?

My version is 魔女たちは空へ飛びあがって、一斉に「どこか遠くへ連れていって」と言いました。

I wanted to say: "The witches rose up to the sky and said together "Take us
somewhere far away!"

It is a fairytale.

Should I use 一緒に insted of 一斉に?

Can witches command to their broomsticks どこか遠くへ連れていって or it should me another
words?
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Is my sentence correct?
一斉に is used when **many** people do the same short action simultaneously and
often individually (e.g., visiting a website). On the other hand, 一緒に is just
like "together"; it can be used with a long action (like 買いものをする), and it can
be used when there are only two people, but it's usually not used when many
people do the same thing individually. In your context, both are fine, but 一斉に
looks a bit more natural to me.

どこか遠くへ連れていって looks perfectly fine to me.
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