i like your presentation except for timing. the laughing to yourself is positive if you be more selective about it. i watched the whole video and you are smart but you're not setting a high enough bar for your jokes/witticisms, etc you can do your thing and make it accessible to a good number of people but you need to work on opening up more complexities in your subject, and what i mean by that is you can choose to have this be a smart commentary on social phenomena or a rant