Write an editorial letter to Michael providing feedback for his manuscript, No One Can. Tell him that there's nothing wrong with it from a storytelling perspective. He's got interesting characters, nice gory imagery, and good ideas overall, but the way that the information is presented needs work. The constant shifting of perspectives is distracting and should be changed to either entirely first-person from Zack's point of view or entirely third-person omniscient. Also mention that there are several formatting errors that I've pointed out to him on the document itself and that he's free to reach out to me if he has any questions. Sign off should be Your Editor, Michelle. 


Hello Michael, 

Thank you so much for allowing me to look over your manuscript, No One Can. Formatting errors have been pointed out on the document itself and this letter will provide the rest of my general feedback.  

First off, I'd like to say that from a storytelling perspective, there’s not anything wrong here. You’ve got good ideas, some interesting characters, and lots of awesome gory imagery. All of that works well. However, the way the information is presented could use some work. I think you need to make a firm decision about whether the story should be written in the third person omniscient, or first person from Zack’s perspective. The constant shifting of perspectives is too confusing for the reader and takes away from the narrative as a whole. 

Please review the manuscript with this change in mind and feel free to let me know if you have any questions. Thanks again!

Your Editor, 
Michelle