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What is significant and an indication of Joyce’s originality in relation to child narration here is entering into the consciousness of the child Stephen Dedalus, the reader experiences the events, emotions, family life, and education of the protagonist in a way that allows us to see the narrator not as a detached, observing presence but as an intimate participant in the mind of the child. For the first time the reader is exploring young child’s psychological struggles and tensions; a deep penetration into the processes of the soul, at such an intimate level. Child Stephen must navigate through the treacherous waters of conflicting forces- family, religion, school and national expectations- each of which attempts to define his sense of self and determine his ultimate destiny. Family is no longer viewed as a paradisiacal island where children are cosseted but a double- edged sword- a sword that can impose constraints on personal freedom and self-discovery
