[speaker001:] Erm John and Jonathan sit down but when I I want you to read your essay about your home. Simon... I want you to read about your home as well
[speaker002:] ...
[speaker001:] and as Martin is still giving out I think I'll have you Christopher please to read yours about monster, so I'll have the two monster ones first and then the two home ones. Right, just sit down for a minute and let's, Michael read his first.
[speaker002:] [reading] The monster from the marsh. I saw the monster arrive from the marsh he looked at the... when I saw him I ran [] ... [reading] The monster from the marsh. When I was walking past the marsh one, one night, when I was on my way back from school I heard a rus rustling noise behind a bu bush, when I went up the, went up first to the bush a big dragon-like thing jumped out from behind the bush, it gave me such a fright I nearly fainted. I started to run up, straight up the hill, erm lucky the monster was running straight at me and sticking out of the crowd and he tripped over and after the end []... [reading] My home. My home is near the trees and I live there... in, in my house there is I have lots of places in my and I have one... one pigeon and a dog. My home is made of wood, and the roof is made of tin and the colour of it is grey. It has two doors, one, four windows, I, I don't have the garden or, oh, in my house there are six rooms and one of them is er, one, one of them is my, is my room and a picture and a my... my, and room and er... ... [] [reading] My home. I live in a tree so does my mum... tree house, my mum and my dad and my brother and my dog and dad live there. Our house is made of wood and is dark green. We have four windows and four doors, we have got a there is a big hill in front of it and it is good, but if it, if the tree house... because we find the, the trees and then... and then we were, we play in the tree house sometimes with the dog. Inside our home we have a lot of furniture, we have four rooms, one in the bathroom, one in the bedroom and one in the lounge... and one in the kitchen []... ...
[speaker001:] Right then. I like erm, Christopher and Simon yes I know, take your books and show right, erm, Jonathan here right John has written a story about his home... right it's a good descriptive story on how people live until one day they couldn't think of any way that you could may improve it.
[speaker002:] [reading] My home. I live in a tree house, my mum and my dad and my brother and my dog and my sister. Our house is made of wood and is dark green, we have a four windows and four doors. It has got wooden roof. There is a big hill in front of it and it is good but erm because we climb the, the tree and climb it and we play in the tree house today with the dog. Inside our home we have a lot of furniture we have four rooms and one in the bathroom, one in the bedroom and one in and one in the lounge... and one in the kitchen here []
[speaker001:] Okay, right
[speaker002:] ...
[speaker001:] So if we cut out the one they might it might flow a bit more easily might it. That's good, it was alright apart from that you describe where John and are living well
[speaker002:] Yeah, I didn't see which sort of
[speaker001:] No, did he describe the house though?
[speaker002:] Yeah
[speaker001:] Yeah, I think his description of where he was living in the tree house was very clear I think he could improve it just a bit Jonathan and then it might flow a bit more evenly, might it then, right Michael bring yours out now please. Just a minute John, right Michael I want you to read yours through once more for me please. Do it about the monster...
[speaker002:] [reading] Monster from the marsh. When I saw the monster from the marsh, one night, I was, I was, I was frightened, I, I, I, I was he looked liked a... when I saw him I ran back to camp and I felt frightened, I hid under my sleeping bag the end []
[speaker001:] Right, see Michael was describing that how he felt
[speaker002:] Yeah
[speaker001:] How did feel then?
[speaker002:] Frightened
[speaker001:] You think that he came out quite What Christine has said then do you think?
[speaker002:] Well you said he went under a sleeping bag
[speaker001:] Aha
[speaker002:] and just, I hid under my sleeping bag, er, then, I thought er the mon what would happen to the monster and so he might of stayed there on, you know, all, all night
[speaker001:] John Well he did say that the monster was rather large, he looked like a bird with some feathers plucked out What else could you bring in his bag? Anything else he could of put in the hat Liam?
[speaker002:] ...
[speaker001:] He vaguely saw the monster and then he ran back to the camp where he was camping, but he didn't describe
[speaker002:] Where, where Yeah, where
[speaker001:] So he could of put a little bit in about how he ran back
[speaker002:] Yeah
[speaker001:] and what he went through in, in that couldn't he?
[speaker002:] Yeah
[speaker001:] Right, the people who have not read an essay out yet, I want you to sit, just a minute Michael, next to somebody and I want you to read your essay to them and see what they think about it and how you could maybe improve it and I want Michael and John to go and show Steve your books as well now please, right boys do that now then, yes, could you take yours to show please
[speaker002:] ... Do we have to show both? Not sure... it's still working. It's still working The thingy Is it recording us? Is it recording? Yeah ... My dad's got all this ... [children reading essays in class room all together]
[speaker001:] Sorry Steve, erm, that you're not going to read your essay and and that isn't essay, either work your book or, and get it er, yes, well it has to be up and when you've finished it you can then do a picture about your