واقترح الاستعاضة عن عبارة "وفي حالة السماح بفرض هذه التقييدات، يجب على الدول أن تدلل في كل حالة على ضرورتها وألا تتخذ إلا التدابير المناسبة " Where such restrictions are permitted, States must in any case demonstrate their necessity and" only take measures which are proportionate…" بعبارة "وحيثما تفرض هذه التقييدات، يجب على الدولة أن تدلل على ضرورتها وألا تتخذ إلا التدابير المناسبة " "Where such restrictions are mabe, States must demonstrate their necessity and only take such measures as are proportionate…".
In the next sentence, he suggested replacing “Where such restrictions are permitted, States must in any case demonstrate their necessity and only take measures which are proportionate …” by “Where such restrictions are made, States must demonstrate their necessity and only take such measures as are proportionate …”.